Allen Dixon is a good friend from my days at AnnuityNet and also a published
author. Here is our email exchange about his comments on the
Blue Screen of DeathAllen: Jawwad, you have written a great book. I was most impressed with your writing style. I think you would make a great novelist. I did make some mental notes as I read through it. So in case you are interested here are my thoughts (for what they are worth).
First, great writing really seems like it would be a great novel. Second, the emails started off fine, but as the venture started to wind up thetone of how they were presented changed and it seemed to come across as being obsessed or defensive. Something changed from the start in how they were presented, soul searching being done, etc. In the end it felt like there was too much internal focus and really dragged down the story.
Jawwad: Is this with respect to emails or with respect to the context part that precedes the emails.
Allen comment: I think it was the context more than the emails, but then again maybe the power of the emails carried over.
Allen: Third, not sure I agree with the assessments. They are made with 20/20hindsight, yes, but some things are not knowable. A different approach may ormay not have helped, but in telling what went wrong the prescription seemed dogmatic, like of course this would have worked. And what is missing is the context of the times. Technology was king and any new venture had to play to that strength.
Jawwad: Absolutely. I think I needed to qualify more strongly that though I feel that this should or would work better but there must be other variations around. And that there are no right or wrong answers – but approximations driven by the context of our times.
Allen: Fourth, working in "proof" that this advice is right because of the latest success doesn't actually strengthen the argument. In fact it gives the story the tone of someone with an axe to grind.
Jawwad: Yup. Agreed. Have you read Crimes against logic.
Allen comment: Nope, but it sounds like something I should look into.
Allen: Fifth, it is still not clear what the venture was really trying to offer, howit would make money, market itself, etc. This was admitted throughout the story, so in the end when going over lessons learned that makes it hard to say what would have worked. If more of the advice was hedged, then the tone might be more supportive less combative.
Jawwad: a. Sell per seat licenses to corporate that are a function of number of courses
b. Sell individual courses to individuals on a course or yearly subscription basis.
Allen comment: Okay, and maybe I just missed that in my reading. That sounds like a very good approach.
Allen: Finally, the impact would have been some much greater if the initial character"told" the story. The emails could still be the core of the plot, but there needed to be more narrative, more scenes to see the context see current events see the impact on family and friends. That would have spoken volumes as opposed to the guide section. It seems to me that people are more likely to take advice when they see it in action than when it is offered in bullet form. Besides with every situation being different, it makes more sense to pick just a small number of lessons (between 3 and 5) for people to hear and retain.
Jawwad: Possibly looking at book two with a different tone and more narrative but with Alchemy as the background, not Avicena.
Allen comment: I really liked the idea of rating bad decisions based on impact. But it seemed to be just at the macro level. Is there a way to pull that down a notch so that people could use these guide posts while starting a new venture and determine how far off track they are? or at least develop a way for measuring potential impact of red flags? That would seem helpful.
Jawwad: Could you give me an example of how a specific list could be made more relevant. I am looking at a revised edition within the next two to three months based on feedback like this from friends and family.
Allen Comment: I can't find the exact passage now, but you talked about making bad decisions
and how long it takes to recover. Some are minor and you rebound quickly, other
of course are more catastrophic. It seemed to me in reading that section that
you might have really niffty way to help young businesses avoid trouble. We
all make mistakes, it is how fast you recover that seems most important to me.
And the key there is to understand how bad the mistake, and hence how strong
the corrective action. So to make the list hit home, if you could describe some
warning signs. The best I can think of is an analogy from project management.
You know you are in trouble when the things you would like to say to a client,
without them knowing the source, varies so much from what you can officially
tell them that you know there is a real problem. In other words if you can't be
fully honest on material facts, then you have a mess. Lots of folks find themselves
deep into this type of situation without realizing they have a problem. So this simple
gut check can help project managers.
Allen: Although it begs the question is the goal to create a company or to go after a big IPO? The underlying premise in the story is that the IPO was the goal, yet many ofthe lessons seem geared towards getting a company, any size, going. I doubt,but I could be wrong, that any size would have worked in the Internet IPO world of 1999/2000. It had to be big, it had to dream, it did not have to have revenues, or customers or even great products. At least that is the way it seemed to me.
Jawwad: Yes and No. I think we always debated whether we would be better off without VC money or even an IPO because the target market and the underlying business model if executed properly were very promising.
Allen comment: Good, and maybe that was in the book and I just missed it. But I think it is
important to your lessons whether a new business is focused on a grand IPO or
just survival.
Allen: In the end though this was a great read. I really enjoyed the book and hated to have it end... When can I order a hardback copy?
Jawwad: No hardcopy for now – only ebook edition on Powells.com and Dieselbooks.com. Print edition most likely somewhere in October/November of this year depending on the feedback and reaction to the ebook.